Haiku and short tales
Haiku and short tales
haiku at the zoo
moonglow fills the night
between bars and eyes and tongues
a worn pacing path
moonglow fills the night
between bars and eyes and tongues
a worn pacing path
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Re: Haiku and short tales
falling leaves no sound
one scream: claws grab peeping mouse
falling leaves, no sound
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where firelight meets night
glowing eyes patiently wait
the first embers dim
glowing eyes patiently wait
the first embers dim
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Outside the window
Tree leaves dance silently
Traffic roars like the ocean
Tree leaves dance silently
Traffic roars like the ocean
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Re: Haiku and short tales
This page helped me a decade ago lot writing a bit more "original" style Haiku. I found it tricky to really get a good "cut" in the centre. Personally I believe without a distinct but subtle shift or "turn", opening up the earlier meaning, one tends to end up with flower print wallpaper. But don't let that stop anyone trying :)
Some of the best example I remember coming from The Heron's Nest. Here are my two favorites, I find them hard to top although they use the alternative counts which some argue are better for English.
Some of the best example I remember coming from The Heron's Nest. Here are my two favorites, I find them hard to top although they use the alternative counts which some argue are better for English.
- creak of the swing . . .
my feet still reach
the sky
- animal skull
the child fingers
her eye
- chilling northeast winds
herding sheep towards a shelter:
warm glow of sunset
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पूरे दिन चाय पीने
मैं आज रात को सोने के लिए नहीं मिल सकता है
कल यहाँ है
मैं आज रात को सोने के लिए नहीं मिल सकता है
कल यहाँ है
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Drinking tea all day
I can not get to sleep tonight
Tomorrow is here
Very good Kunga! Not sure why you wrote it in Hindi. Perhaps it was Darjeeling? When I put it through a translation a few more times (a game I used to play when Internet was still fresh) we get something different though. Although translation sites have become way too good these days. Too much exactness, little fun.
The Day of drinking tea
You can get sleep tonight as I have already suggested
Meeting convened
I can not get to sleep tonight
Tomorrow is here
Very good Kunga! Not sure why you wrote it in Hindi. Perhaps it was Darjeeling? When I put it through a translation a few more times (a game I used to play when Internet was still fresh) we get something different though. Although translation sites have become way too good these days. Too much exactness, little fun.
The Day of drinking tea
You can get sleep tonight as I have already suggested
Meeting convened
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A decade ago I wrote:This page helped me a decade ago …
Smooth stone plunks in pool
Tiny tsunamis ring out
Silent energy
A month after I wrote this, the tsunami of 2004 occurred. This gave me a pause, to contemplate.
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This sends chills up myCahoot wrote:A decade ago I wrote:This page helped me a decade ago …
Smooth stone plunks in pool
Tiny tsunamis ring out
Silent energy
A month after I wrote this, the tsunami of 2004 occurred. This gave me a pause, to contemplate.
spine the power of subtle
energy making
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The Indian teaDiebert van Rhijn wrote: Not sure why you wrote it in Hindi. Perhaps it was Darjeeling?
vibrated with India
and so... my heart beats
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Is it summer or
winter - climate change has
spun my convictions.
winter - climate change has
spun my convictions.
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Swirling swarms of gnats
Buddha frozen in statue
Clouds frozen in sky
Buddha frozen in statue
Clouds frozen in sky
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So when is anyone actualy going to try to write Haiku here? Although I liked to one about tea, it not really qualifies either.
Perhaps you all do as much effort with them as with philosophy? Haiku's are supposed to be harder than anything else to write! I only wrote one so far which comes close but still not good. It needs to be way more immersive, more direct and also more (somewhat) surprising at the end. Here's an award winning one as example, from Sandra Simpson, see how it takes you to a place, a smell, sound and a little mystery about what is gasping. Stripped from everything else!
Perhaps you all do as much effort with them as with philosophy? Haiku's are supposed to be harder than anything else to write! I only wrote one so far which comes close but still not good. It needs to be way more immersive, more direct and also more (somewhat) surprising at the end. Here's an award winning one as example, from Sandra Simpson, see how it takes you to a place, a smell, sound and a little mystery about what is gasping. Stripped from everything else!
- receding tide the gasps of little
shells
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unpinned golden locks
her unholstered thirty-eights
captured Randy Bear
her unholstered thirty-eights
captured Randy Bear
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fuschia petunias
and the taste of cardamom
orchids listening
and the taste of cardamom
orchids listening
Re: 6 word stories
God found alive. Search efforts continue.
Re: 7 word story
The toast is toasting. I am toast.
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Re: 6 word stories
In the beginning was the end.
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not wanting to harm
i scoop ant with a napkin
now he is limping
i broke the ants leg
he limps, i limp, we both limp
limping together
funny how that works
non-duality limping
serendipity
i scoop ant with a napkin
now he is limping
i broke the ants leg
he limps, i limp, we both limp
limping together
funny how that works
non-duality limping
serendipity
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Doctor No mumbled the unfamiliar word.
Re: Fractured Fairae Tales
Ruined by Bruins
After my long journey
all I wanted was to sit
nothing fancy
just a chair, to ease my feet
relax, and sigh.
And all I wanted
was some soup
that wouldn’t burn my tongue
or taste like cold grits
And a bed, perhaps
a safe place at day’s end
to ponder my fate, before sleep
where I was going, where I had been.
All I wanted
was a happy world
that is not too hot
or not too cold
but is ever so right
and never changes
forever and ever.
Damn the bears!
Damn the bears!
After my long journey
all I wanted was to sit
nothing fancy
just a chair, to ease my feet
relax, and sigh.
And all I wanted
was some soup
that wouldn’t burn my tongue
or taste like cold grits
And a bed, perhaps
a safe place at day’s end
to ponder my fate, before sleep
where I was going, where I had been.
All I wanted
was a happy world
that is not too hot
or not too cold
but is ever so right
and never changes
forever and ever.
Damn the bears!
Damn the bears!
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unlettered loon laugh
arrow piercing foggy veil
a haunting I am
arrow piercing foggy veil
a haunting I am
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Sky says to the earth
Let's meet at the horizon
Bring mystery seeds
Let's meet at the horizon
Bring mystery seeds
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nothing to say now
mind swimming in swirling thoughts
chocolate black hole
mind swimming in swirling thoughts
chocolate black hole
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haiku like the wind!
but break the form of haiku
and you break the wind
but break the form of haiku
and you break the wind